There was really far too much villain perspective in this book. And that destroyed any semblance of mystery and made Eve look like an idiot for going There was really far too much villain perspective in this book. And that destroyed any semblance of mystery and made Eve look like an idiot for going after the wrong person. I really didn't care what the villains were thinking, and I think I would have been happier following along with Eve's deduction process, rather than knowing everything and watching her fumble along the wrong path....more
I hate it when a book I otherwise could have quite liked is ruined by a lack of editing. In this case, the dearth of commas was extremely irritating.
II hate it when a book I otherwise could have quite liked is ruined by a lack of editing. In this case, the dearth of commas was extremely irritating.
I have a possibly unhealthy love for pretty androgynous men in drag, so I was more than prepared to love this book. [image] [image] [image]� (Um... I totally don't have nearly a gig of photos of pretty men, many in dresses, on my computer. Really. And those are Asagi, Hizaki, and Mana, if you were at all curious.) But there were apparently any number of factors conspiring against me, pretty much ruining my enjoyment and making the book kind of a chore to read.
First of all, commas! What do people have against them? I found their lack especially glaring after all the interjections. For example, the sentence "Christ Nicholas!" looks exceeding odd without a comma. And "oh" is an interjection, but there never seemed to be a comma after it, either.
(Does anyone know the Schoolhouse Rock song?
"In-terjections Show excitement Or emotion. They're generally set apart from a sentence By an exclamation point, Or by a comma when the feeling's not as strong.)
Sometimes there were commas where semicolons (or periods for the haters) would have been much more appropriate. And there was also a lack of commas before addressing a person. (Such as, "You're not lonely Fred," which should really be, "You're not lonely, Fred." The first seems to imply the speaker is looking for "Lonely Fred.") This was prevalent throughout the book, and was exceedingly annoying.
I generally don't like first person, and I found its use here distracting. (And I wanted to know what the hero was thinking!) I think the present tense added to my dislike, as well. If the book's going to be in first person, I'd prefer it at least be past tense. Present tense makes it seem like the person is narrating their life as it happens, which is odd, to say the least, whereas past tense makes it seem more like a story. And the addressing of "you" is (almost) never a good thing. I can't say I liked the voice of the character, either, and it had a tendency to feel stiff in places. And the tangents, while perhaps appropriate to actual conversations, were annoying mid-narrative.
As for the plot, was it really necessary for him to have sex with the Italian woman? I suppose it wasn't exactly cheating, since the hero and heroine weren't actually together yet, but at that point in their relationship it still felt icky. The hero seemed to be pursuing the heroine, and knew she was jealous, but slept with the other woman anyway. (And then went on to the tell the heroine that he'd imagined the woman was her. Creepy much?)
I really wanted to like this book, but I just couldn't get into it, in large part due to those dratted missing commas. So please, authors, get someone to proofread your manuscripts!...more
(What is wrong with the guy on the cover's abs? They're missing!)
I enjoyed reading this book. It was fun, although some parts did drag a bit.
The heroi(What is wrong with the guy on the cover's abs? They're missing!)
I enjoyed reading this book. It was fun, although some parts did drag a bit.
The heroine was quite annoying at times. She was overly idealistic in a way that really got on my nerves. The hero was lovely, though. I adore (the occasional) heroes that aren't born to privilege.
There were some errors, such as might and sight for mite and site, and lathe for lave (ouch!). With all the ebooks I've been reading, I thought I had become more insensitive to things like this, but apparently that only applies to ebooks.
Perhaps not the best of Connie Brockway's books, as it's an early one, but I was certainly glad to see that there were no English lords with titles to mangle....more
I love selkies, so just for that alone I adored this book. I've had it in my TBR pile for a while, but once I found out it had selkies, it went right I love selkies, so just for that alone I adored this book. I've had it in my TBR pile for a while, but once I found out it had selkies, it went right to the top.
The "I love you"s came a bit quickly, especially considering this guy's been a hermit for fifteen years. (Or if not quite a hermit, then certainly close to it.) But even with that, I still liked the book....more
My main complaint would be that the heroine was convinced she could get her eyesight back... and did. ThThis was definitely my favorite of the series.
My main complaint would be that the heroine was convinced she could get her eyesight back... and did. This always just seems like such a cop-out when authors do it. I would much rather have seen a progression from denial to learning how to cope with it....more
I wanted more from the hero's perspective, and can't say I liked the paranormal elements that much.I wanted more from the hero's perspective, and can't say I liked the paranormal elements that much....more
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