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ARC received in exchange for an honest review

sad to report that this was genuinely one of the worst novels i have read in a long time. i will try to be less scathing in this review but i can't promise good structure or flow in this, considering the author did not.

first off, i need to get the most uncomfortable aspect of this novel off my chest first: Celestina's relationship with her father. i did not like the development nor did i feel like the narration of minor, passing characters regarding their relationship as necessary. we were introduced to so many characters and get to read from their perspectives throughout the novel, but for what reason? it did not add to the depth of the main characters nor did it provide any insight to the story that was unfolding. reading from some random movie director about Celestina's relationship with her father took us away from the very sensitive and intimate events that were happening. also, i hated the reason of her father's condition, seemingly out of nowhere, no explanation whatsoever. this decision of the author not only justified the behavior of her father by explaining it away as a result of this fantastical element, but it also reduced what happened as a trivial plot device that pushed our main character to develop further, which i hate. what was the reason for all this anyway? if it's a way to drive the character towards developing her identity, then it was a cheap and unnecessary way to do so. i cannot believe this will be published in the year of our lord 2024. maybe this novel has taken years to come together, but surely one can move with the times and idk, find better alternatives to drive the story forward? everything was so poorly escalated, too. the dialogue and narration were so stilted and awkward, which brings me to my next point.

the dialogue is terribly wooden. absolutely nobody talks like that. very pre-2013 teleserye dialogue. ridiculous and soapy. it took me out of the story several times and i got annoyed with the cliché line drops and narrative maneuverings. i thought this would give me something fresh, you know? alas no, the tropes were tired and lazy� yet i would have excused this, and would have taken all this criticism as a bad decision made by debut author, by virtue of Filipino pride and solidarity had the novel been at least well-written... which is unfortunately not the case. is it really difficult to write well? considering it's your job? like first of all, where is the editor? i beg you to reevaluate your decisions. secondly, how did this get approved by so many people? again, reevaluate your decisions and maybe try to reflect on yourself. do not let bias get in the way! finally, is it this easy to get published nowadays when all one has to do is angle with the POC narrative? shouldn't we prioritize obtaining quality work first? i would have loved to celebrate a born and raised Filipino getting published in the West� but not with this quality! where's the magis? in line with the poor dialogue and narration, i want to say my piece about the use of Filipino and Hokkien languages. initially, the incorporation of the Filipino language was exciting to read. i have never before read an English book with as many correctly used Filipino words as there was in this novel, and they were very natural! i could tell that the author spoke the language well and grew up with it. but while i enjoyed reading the Filipino words and being able to understand the context and references being made by the author as only someone who has lived in the country can do so, i beg the author to stay away from trying to write Hokkien. being Filipino-Chinese myself (much like Celestina) this should be checked again by someone. thankfully, the Hokkien was not a lot to warrant much attention from me but i was annoyed nonetheless with the use of my language and context just to “deepen� Celestina's character. i know she's some made-up granddaughter of Henry Sy and you think “oh we should show how Chinese she is� but i would have really preferred the author to stay away from it if she does not have anyone to check this aspect. for example, no Fil-Chi person greets another in the Hokkien translation of "How are you?" because that is the Western way of greeting, which the author should know. i do not know the author's context and how they grew up, but i am quite sure that my current context and lived experiences are closer to that of the main character's, even if she comes from a wealthy family.

so what can be done to improve? i suggest two more years of heavy editing tbh. this is not publication ready. i would have liked a focus on the influence of local myths to the stories because then it would have made sense why the fictional serials of Celestina's father are such a hit. with this emphasis and connection to the characters, it would have meant a lot more for Celestina to take the house that was so haunted by the many spirits that her father writes about. to be honest, the magical realism was so poorly incorporated into this novel. i would have appreciated a more consistent and cohesive approach rather than it being sprinkled around when convenient. this brings me to my next point: the lack of a central theme. how can one write a decent novel without a main theme? why are you even writing this novel? why is this even titled “Celestina's House� when our main character Celestina just prances around Manila and tries to find love? we have lost the main point of the story. i wish we got to explore the house more and focused more on what having her own space means and what this old relic of a house has done to her self-identity, even as it is haunted by spirits of the past. i would have wanted her to develop a deeper connection to the haunted house and how this could have been an avenue for her to heal from her traumas. i would have wanted a focus on the various Filipino superstitions and how it affects everyday rituals and routine. perhaps here, her Chinese identity could have been better inserted, as Fil-Chi have many more superstitions that are centered around fortune, health, and marriage. and now, you can see how this can connect to the old haunted house. but anyway, i am only a reader and this will be published either way. what happened was that the characters move through the book like they're not real. events happened, escalated tackily, and the characters were too passive to make a good story.

so, there is no overarching theme! there was no connection nor cohesion to the narrative. things happen and then we move. have i mentioned how ridiculous the plot escalation was? and how soap opera-like, too: unnecessarily dramatic and unrealistic. dialogue was stiff and narration was clumsy. nothing was done well except the descriptions of Manila, which i applaud� as only someone who has lived here and walked these streets can know what to describe. but then again, the characters read like they were written by a 12 year old, so one-dimensional and nonsensical. actually, the entire story is so poorly written that i am very disappointed in everybody involved in the making of this novel. i'm sorry. if i could give this zero stars i would, but i'll be nice and give this 1 star for the worldbuilding.